Here is a little bit that I wrote in my journal as sort of a diary entry. I like to write when I feel overwhelmed, and because I have only shared stories so far, I thought I should share another kind of writing that I do. I want to improve my flow, and make sure that my sentences make sence to others as well as myself.
Thanks for sharing. I think nearly anyone could relate to what you were writing. I think no matter who you are or where you are at in life, you always wonder, worry and wish. I thought it was great that you were will to share with us your excitement, but at the same time your fears. I almost wonder if this could be two different pieces, one about teaching and one about traveling.
ReplyDeleteWow! Congratulations on being so close to done! Oh the adventures that await! I think your piece really reflects your visions and dreams for your next steps. The first page flowed really well by itself and the second page as well, however, thought they needed some more transition sentences to flow them together into one. The "Life is a Mystery" section almost felt poetic. I wonder if you could turn that into a poem?
ReplyDeleteWhat a excellent beginning to a fabulous story. I really like the beginning paragraph because it really hooked me into reading more. I love mysteries. I can feel the excitement and even some unknown things in your writing. I feel that there are two different topics in this piece of writing that could be broken into two. Topic one being traveling and topic two about teaching. Good luck! on your adventure once your done.
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